This also doesn't have a story to go along with it so please comment!!! (sorry it isn't as exciting...)
The girl walked towards the ocean heels in one hand
the bottom of her dress in the other. Her toes dipped into the water, it
was suddenly up to her waist but she kept going farther. A cold, unmerciful
wave hit her in the face and strangely she started to laugh. Then a figure came
into view, the girl squinted trying to make out who it was her laugh the only
sound that filled the air echoed along the shore. As soon as she realized who
it was she stopped laughing and the person stopped walking in the utter
silence. Silently she stood up, left the ocean, and as soon as she hit beach
started to run, tears already mixing with the salt water on her face.
This is somewhat more clumsy than the first piece. You allude to a conflict between the girl and the figure and give no details. This piece is interesting but somehow not as selfcontained as the first. This may well have been your intention.
ReplyDeleteI love flash fiction and both the first and second piece are trully entertaining.